Post 9: Script Workshop 2

After removing, adding and changing our script we are almost finished writing it. We made quite a few changes over the course of changing it in order to create the best script we could and one that would be most beneficial to telling the story and showing the different stages of sexual grooming. They also helped develop the characters and their relationships.

 

We developed the relationship between Alan and Sophie to make it seem more realistic to the audience by giving them a past, shown mainly through the montages. In discussions we agreed as a group that we didn’t want to make it as obvious that Alan is grooming Sophie as it had been in our AS and previous drafts so decided not to include any physical of sexualised scenes in the hopes of keeping the audience guessing. We used subtle hints to suggest what was going on, such as Alan putting his hand on her shoulder, but also to confuse the audience, for example the looks Sophie gives Alan suggest she has made up their relationship or that Alan sees her as a daughter. We also edited the dialog to make it not only seem more realistic but suggestive and open for interpretation into what they mean.

 

 

 

We also wanted to make sure the stages of grooming were well defined and visible to the audience. By doing this not only will it inform the audience on the stages of sexual grooming but it also shows the development of the characters and the story.

 

 

Another thing we changed was the language the characters use, when we originally wrote it we had used grammar and fully formed sentences but when people speak they don’t speak like that. We went through, especially the girl’s (Sophie and Paige) and changed their dialogue by using more ‘common’ words and adding ‘slag’ in to make it more realistic.

 

Once we had a complete script we sat down with our actors for a read-through, we recorded a few scenes to see what kind of set up would be best.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R120aRCaXBc&feature=youtu.be

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NtQqcwJRYUE&feature=youtu.be

Throughout writing the script we have asked the opinions of our target audience and before it is finished we are now waiting to hear the feedback from them to make sure it sounds right, the story is understandable and easy to understand yet keeps them guessing and that they would find it interesting if they were going to watch the film.