Post 10: Script Feedback

Before we could officially complete our script we wanted to get feedback from our target audience. Throughout the process of writing and re-writing I had shown my friends, and coincidently people from our target audience, sections of the script and they had offered their opinions and views about what we had. However, because they hadn’t seen the entire script and because they are biased we didn’t only rely on their opinion. We then showed the finished script to a random sample of people in our target audience and collected their feedback. Once we had collected all the feedback we then discussed whether we should make additional changes to the script and to what parts.

Most of the feedback we received was positive with small suggestions like making sure the language used by the characters fit the age and class of people of a similar position. This meant we would have to go through the script changing phrasing and grammar to make it appear more realistic to the audience.

Another piece of feedback we received was that the ending was too clichéd and happy, with the bad guy being arrested, some of our target audience wanted an extra twist at the end. We thought about what we could add to shock the audience and agreed on the idea that Alan should be having a sexual relationship with his daughter. We hoped this would shock and appal the audience and on re-reading with an extra sentence added on the end all of our target audience agreed that they didn’t see it coming and that it ‘creeped us out’.

We tried to act on as much of the feedback that we could whilst trying to still keep as close to our ideas as possible in the hope that it would lead to a stronger final script.